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【英语】第一次用英语试写作文…欢迎大家指正

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Yesterday, I went to the clubhouse with my friends. As a result, there were only two women left in the clubhouse. One was pretty and the other was extremely ugly.
My friend took care of me and said, "Leave the beautiful one to you. My ugly one turned off the lights all the same. As long as the following is cool, what do you care about Yan's value?"
In this way, I entered the room with my beautiful little sister. I was preparing for further communication when I suddenly found out that this little sister seemed to be my first love. out of the feelings of first love, I decided to give up my wild desires for my little sister and talked with her all night. it was getting light.
I said to her, "can you tell me your name?" She gently said a word in my ear and disappeared, my mouth repeating her name Jia shan, Jia shan


IP属地:广东来自iPhone客户端1楼2024-11-25 10:30回复
    没太看懂。。。
    怎么就突然 As a result了


    IP属地:河南2楼2024-11-25 10:32
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      2026-04-24 16:10:48
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      看完了
      充满了一种传统机翻的美


      IP属地:河南3楼2024-11-25 10:33
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        再多写5块的


        IP属地:广东来自iPhone客户端4楼2024-11-25 14:56
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          can you tell me your name你听过哪个外国人这样说


          IP属地:陕西来自Android客户端5楼2024-11-25 19:05
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            有些中式英语的感觉,句子组合在一起很多地方都不通顺
            英语只有在英语思维下写出来才能读得通顺,这个还是需要克服中翻的习惯


            IP属地:中国香港来自Android客户端6楼2024-11-26 00:20
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              it's no goood to go to a brothel, and be aware those whores r bad for ur health both mentally and physically and u know what some viruses spread only through intimacy. boy


              IP属地:四川7楼2024-11-26 09:43
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                Yesterday, I went to the clubhouse with my friends, and by the time we arrived, only two women remained. One was strikingly beautiful, while the other… well, she wasn’t as fortunate in the looks department.
                My friend nudged me with a grin and said, “The beautiful one’s yours. The lights go off just the same for me—what matters is the vibe, not the appearance, right?”
                Amused but grateful, I stepped into a room with the beautiful woman. As we started chatting, something about her struck me as oddly familiar. Then it hit me—she reminded me of my first love.
                That realization changed everything. Instead of giving in to fleeting desires, I spent the night lost in conversation with her, reliving old feelings and exploring new ones. Before we knew it, dawn had arrived.
                As the first light crept into the room, I asked softly, “What’s your name?”
                Leaning close, she whispered a single word in my ear: “Jia Shan.”
                And then, just like a dream, she was gone, leaving me whispering her name into the morning light— Jia Shan… Jia Shan.


                IP属地:新加坡10楼2024-11-27 09:31
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                  2026-04-24 16:04:48
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                  学英语主要是个语言环境问题,置身英语环境,快则三个月,慢也不会超过半年语言关就过了,不然学也是白学,永远赶不上遗忘速度


                  IP属地:四川来自Android客户端12楼2025-07-01 17:56
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                    the other 那里不对吧,emm,至少也得是another one


                    IP属地:贵州来自Android客户端13楼2025-07-01 20:25
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                      中式逻辑 所以不是这么用的


                      IP属地:澳大利亚来自Android客户端14楼2025-07-05 14:40
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                        IP属地:吉林来自Android客户端17楼2025-11-19 12:34
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